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You and Me
« on: October 02 2006, 06:27 pm »
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You and Me

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after chapter 130! drama-angst-romance, KuroFai

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Re: You and Me
« Reply #1 on: October 03 2006, 12:36 am »
I liked it, I got a little teary eyed.


Aw! They like each other! <3

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Re: You and Me
« Reply #2 on: October 03 2006, 08:28 am »
Your writing style is quite different from what is usually seen here, like some sort of between-poetry-and-prose; it looks like poetry, but it doesn't exactly feel like it. My first reaction after reading it was something along the lines of: "what? it ends so suddenly?", but I liked the ending better after re-reading it.  However, it still was a bit sudden. The business with not being able to change the things you've done is brought up too late in the fic, I think. Perhaps you should consider planting some of these thoughts in the beginning as well, wrapping up the story nicely. Even short stories need something that tie beginning and end to each other.

Anyhow, I like the concept and the way you write, and I'm looking forward to Fai's POV.
Life's but a walking shadow, a poor player
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage
And then is heard no more: it is a tale
Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
Signifying nothing.

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Re: You and Me
« Reply #3 on: October 03 2006, 08:56 am »
OH, I absolutely loved this! Can't wait for Fai's POV! Post it here when you submit it, kay?

Embrace and kiss me
My feelings of falling in love with you is never ending
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Re: You and Me
« Reply #4 on: October 03 2006, 07:23 pm »
yay, thank you so much to the comments :3

I updated chapter 2 ^^ Hope you all will like it ^___^

" You will be able to meet different people. And then one day You'll never see them again. "

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Re: You and Me
« Reply #5 on: October 03 2006, 11:48 pm »
hmm...............
i didn't reall understand it but keep up the good work :D
it's nice to see people writing :D
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Re: You and Me
« Reply #6 on: October 05 2006, 09:20 am »
huh, didn't understand it... I am sorry if this is cause of my english ^^""

Anyway chapter 3 is up ^___^

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Re: You and Me
« Reply #7 on: October 05 2006, 11:40 am »
Great story! Loved chappie 2!! But didn't understand chapter 3. Gomen ne... -_-

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Re: You and Me
« Reply #8 on: October 08 2006, 07:06 pm »
sorry if it was hard to understand T___T I will try harder next time!

Last chapter is up, not too long but hope you will like it ^^
Thanks for reading it ^^

" You will be able to meet different people. And then one day You'll never see them again. "